Skip to main content

The silence of the fallen

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 32; the thirty-second edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for the month is 'An Untold Story'
"There is a story about that scar and I want to know it...," Jonny said casually joining the table at the high-school reunion. The whole gang was there together except Jagdish who could not fly in to their reunion.

The scar in question was the mark on face of Ravi, who had driven all the way to Goa from remote village of Karnataka. The group of six or the sinister six, as they were known in college, had gathered together as they had promised ten years after college in the remote shack in Goa.  Ravi, Jonny, Jagdish, Bobby, Mangesh and Pankaj had first met during the common detention in their first year in college. These six from six different departments and branches had one thing in common, on the fateful day of Sixteenth December Ninteen Ninteety Nine they all were detained in their respective department for crime so sinister that they were send to the office of director for punishment.





Since then the six made it a point to meet every five years in this old shack. They shared their life and adventures together and laughed at the day when the six met. It was at this meeting only five could come because unknown to the other three Jagdish was killed a year back in the diamond valley. Only Ravi and one other person knew about this in the group.

After college Ravi had made his way into the world doing many odd jobs. He was a bully in his college but in the real life, he realized, there where bigger bullies than him. After a while he joined a private security consultant or a bounty hunter. He would take a lot of money to protect someone or bring something back. A year back Ravi received a call from Jagdish, who after college had turned into a treasure hunter. Treasure hunting was a passion for Jagdish who would go on private funded and government funded missions to excavate gold, diamond, precious stones. His profit was 10% of the find.

All was going fine until he stumbled upon diamond valley. Diamond valley was a bad omen from the start. It was a diamond mine found accidentally by Jagdish during a hiking trip with few friends. The valley was called Devils Omen by the natives as they feared there lived a ancient devil in the valley protecting the demons. They protested excavation of the diamonds for the fear of the demon to be unleased on this world.

Jagdish was not going to be deterred by these small things. He went on with the plan of excavating the diamonds until he... was betrayed. He was killed by someone in this group who betrayed him and killed him in those diamond mines.

Only, one thing, Jagdish had called Ravi on the night of his murder, he mentioned that he was calling members of the sinister six for this finding. The next day when Ravi reached the mine, he saw his friend lying in the pool of blood. Before he could do anything, in the darkness of the diamond mine someone attacked him on his face giving him the scar on the face permanently.

The attacker fled but he knew one among the five was there. Jagdish had called someone else before him and that person had betrayed the friend. One year Ravi waited patiently for the attacker to return but no one came. The attack was for diamonds and whoever had attacked had foiled in his plan to make profit out of it. He knew the attacked would not resist killing him at this get-together, after all it was the question of 100 million diamonds, people have killed their friends for less.

Ravi drove all the way for the get-together to find out if someone was missing, apparently no one, everyone was here. So the killer was here too. The game was on and out of the five here, one of the four was planning to kill him. Ravi had plans of his own.

Rubbing his scar, Ravi smiled back at Jonny and replied to his casual inquiry about the scar, "Nothing much, just another days work..."

The fellow Blog-a-Tonics who took part in this Blog-a-Ton and links to their respective posts can be checked here. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.



Comments

  1. Nicely written story, while I was reading.. I felt like a detective :D
    :) All the best for BAT 32 :)

    Megha

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you and then can you solve this unsolved mystery?

      Delete
    2. I have been really bad with the "Agatha Chritie's Mysteries" ..Haven't read many thriller novels.. :P
      Spare me the investigation this time :D .. Why don't you tell me Who is the Killer :P

      Delete
    3. Alright so here it is... i have almost decided to write part II... maybe for next blogaton or next most. Wait for it....and it is good...:D

      Delete
    4. :) How generous :P .. hehehe.. :)

      I will be here, and if I by any chance forget please give my blog a visit :)
      I am so inquisitive to know how the untold story unfolds..in the part II :D :D

      Delete
  2. Replies
    1. Isn't this supposed to be an untold story... guess....:D

      Delete
  3. When are you going to complete this... eagerly waiting... :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Hey as far as I know this is complete... it is story untold...:D

      Delete
    2. For this BAT it is perfect.. but you should complete it..I think many would love love read the complete one...that includes me also..:)

      Delete
    3. Ok Here is the hint, the killer is mentioned in the above passage....:D

      Delete
  4. Sid..well written untold story..good read
    All the best for BAT


    I am here
    http://odizzey.wordpress.com/2012/10/07/an-untold-story/

    ReplyDelete
  5. That isn't fair...say how about you do a part 2 of this? :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Well fair, the topic was thus and so thus I completed the uncompleted story....:D

      Delete
  6. Sinister :) Hmm, felt like a Hardy Boys kinda thing :) So was it Ravi only? Best wishes for BAT!

    ReplyDelete
  7. complete the story pls...

    yeah yeah its an untold story,, but come on make an exception..

    u know its a great sin to leave a wonderful mystery incomplete

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Aah well so many people are demanding maybe ill have to write the next part...o.O

      Delete
  8. Please write the next part ! So , so interesting ! Best of luck :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Sure now I have almost decided to write the next part... :D wait for it soon...

      Delete
  9. I never expected such a thriller, awesome post.Eagerly waiting for the sequel .

    Do visit mine http://www.stylisharjun.blogspot.in/2012/10/an-untold-story.html

    ReplyDelete
  10. u got to write the sequel...cant wait
    ATB for BAT :)

    ReplyDelete
  11. After Harry Potter scar, this is going to be the next famous scar!!
    And, welcome back to BAT :-)

    ReplyDelete
  12. Welcome back Sidoscope :)

    Happy to see you writing for Blogaton :) That was an untold story about sinister six, but I wonder who could be the killer :)

    PS: I'm human, please disable word verification and enable comment moderation bro :)

    Someone is Special

    ReplyDelete

Post a Comment

What do you think about the post? Have your say, like, dislike or even hate me. Tell me.

You might also want to Subscribe to RSS feeds or follow me on Twitter (@sidoscope) or on facebook

I don't need weapon, I have a sharp tongue.

Popular posts from this blog

The moaning of life #2 Childhood Trauma

The entire shark family is out for a hunt, and the little fish are running for their life. We get to cheer as the Baby Shark does Doo Doo Doo Doo Doo with his family, calling on the family - extended family and sometimes robots on the 'hunt' because your offspring decides that that is the one song they want you to play or a tantrum follows. Many of you will say it's not the content but the catchy tune that draws the babies towards the nonsequential song, but it's more than that. It's the sheer repeatedness that draws your angst towards the piece. And YouTube provides the music based on how much time you want your baby to be engaged to it. You have a 60+ minute version and a 120+ minute version. The same shark family going out on the same hunt. And it's not just the Shark family. Weirdly, baby JJ and his family sing random songs, go on a holiday and even increase the family. I am talking about Cocomelon, which has arrived in your child's life as he murmurs t

We used to build civilizations. Now we build shopping malls.

The human evolution is a constant race against boredom, men have for generations tried to overcome boredom is many ways possible. In olden days, they got bored, they build civilizations, big massive civilizations. The ancient Egyptians had pyramids, the Babylon build the hanging garden for people to hang out. People from far and wide come to visit the Taj Mahal, praising its divine beauty, not knowing that it was build after the wife died, thus partly in guilt. Rome was not build in a day, indication they were super bored. Then came the great barbarian evolution and they started raiding cities. Don't forget Atila the Hun who constantly attacked cities whenever he got free time. Alexander was super bored and he decided to conquer the entire world, but while these men where attacking cities and building civilizations, the women where thrown into a abyss of impending boredom. What would Mrs. Atila do when her husband was busy attacking Rome? Or What would the wives of the

Short Story: Ginger Chai

This is my first attempt for writing a love story, which I am really bad at. Mani Padma (from Ginger Chai ) challenged me to write a love story a few days ago, it is not a real great read, but a little feeble attempt to take a taste in this genre. Please give your honest opinion… Cheers, Sid. *fingers crossed* Breathe in. Breathe out. Damm, this is so easy when you are not tensed. Why is this clerk talking so much time. ‘Will you hurry up?’ I asked the clerk. My finger nails were tapping the counter in excitement. My name is Shailaja, 30, single and employed, in short a perfect girl for the aunties, mammies to constantly remind me that my days are waning out, that I have to find someone before it is impossible for them to. It is not that I don’t want to get married, but I should get some proper match, isn’t it? All they show me is either short, tall, long nose, meaning some imperfection in some way or the other. I am not at all hopeless romantic and I am definitely not goin